The following paragraph is underdeveloped and vague:
The last few minutes before closing time are chaotic at the Von's market where I work. There is confusion everywhere, and everyone is trying to leave on time. Customers and clerks are frantic, and there is always a problem at the last minute.
The paragraph raises but does not answer many questions:
- What kind of confusion?
- Why are the customers and the clerks frantic?
- What kinds of problems erupt at the last minute?
By adding related details, the paragraph becomes fully developed:
The last few minutes before closing time are chaotic at the Von's market where I work. As the checkout clerks begin to total their registers, the store is invaded by last-minute shoppers desperate for cigarettes, milk, or bread. A few customers are still in the vegetable section squeezing each tomato or cantaloupe as the manager paces by nervously. The butcher and his assistants are removing the meat from the display case and putting it in the freezer, slamming the doors like guards at Fort Knox. A little boy is running up and down the aisles calling out for his mother, who returns to the store hysterically looking for him. My friend Manuel, who restocks the shelves, waits impatiently for all of us to leave so that he can bring out his carts full of boxes of canned goods. Finally, the last customer is escorted to the door, and I sit down on an upturned soda case to rest for a few minutes before changing my clothes. In the stockroom, a transistor radio begins to blare out rock lyrics. Suddenly there is a tap on the front door of the store. A customer says he didn’t get his deposit back on the soda bottle he had returned.